DPNR onboarding trailer for Lital (litalshoshan), order FO51519D29BC1. Redone after your note of 06/10 19:04 ("still rushing, stock not great, ignoring her feedback, she mentioned 3D"). Nothing here goes to Lital before you have read it.
Below: every sentence she wrote that asks for something (50 from the chat, 33 from her script), each with the shot that answers it. 24 are marked "missed before".
Her script, beat 1: "Complete darkness. A single point of light appears. We begin moving toward it. Slowly, thousands of stars emerge. The movement accelerates... toward a distant galaxy." One camera, no cut, built and rendered on our own machine in Blender. The voice is Woman A (her pick), one continuous read. Sound: deep tone, a slow pulse from 3 s, air on the passing stars, a swell when the galaxy arrives. No music yet: it goes in after she picks one of the three. The galaxy is the same 3D model that returns inside him at 0:47.
What is still not final in it: the galaxy colours are a first pass (her violet and gold knots are in, but faint), and the last 4 seconds will continue into the Sun and Earth in the full film.



What we take from it
| When | Her words | What the film does | Where |
|---|---|---|---|
| 24/09 | The idea is to use it as a WOW video before onboarding for first time users, but also as a trailer for the product itself. It plays before onboarding AND works as a product trailer. | The film ends inside her real onboarding screen (the violet galaxy, "Why Are You Here?"), so it is the entrance and a trailer of DPNR's own world. missed before | Beat 8 |
| 24/09 | We're going for a Matrix style feel, deep, cinematic and immersive. Matrix feel: a world under the world. | Every layer opens onto another layer under it; dark frame, hard light, the camera always going through something. | All |
| 24/09 | We want the user to feel hooked from the first moment, almost like watching a movie trailer. Hooked from second one. | Frame 1 already moves; her first voice line starts at 3.15 s (measured on Woman A's read); trailer rhythm: build, stop, hit. | Beat 1 |
| 24/09 | אנחנו סטארט אפ שבנה מערכת הפעלה אנושית מבוססת כמובן בינה מלאכותית... ויש בו עומק וגישה אל ״האני״ A human operating system, with depth and access to "the self". | The inside of the person is the longest part of the film (0:27 to 1:01), and his inner light is the gold light her product uses for the Digital Twin. missed before | Beats 4 to 6 |
| 24/09 | יש לי סרטון קצר שאז עשינו למשקיעים... זה לא הכיוון אבל התחושה אולי An investor video: not the direction, but maybe the feeling. | Her product short (the one she sent) read at 1 frame a second: violet cosmos, warm gold light inside darkness, "you can access your Self". We keep that feeling and palette, not its AI pictures. missed before | Look |
| 24/09 | הסרטון הוא באנגלית נרצה להוסיף לו תרגום בעברית כאופציה. לדעתי נרצה קריינות. English with a Hebrew option; voiceover. | English voiceover master; Hebrew subtitle version after it is approved. | Delivery |
| 24/09 | אני שמה לך סרטון של המוצר... רק שתבין את המוצר Watch the product so you understand it. | Watched whole 06/10 (57.6 s). What we take: the violet galaxy onboarding with the cream "Let's Discover" button, the gold glowing body with a light at the heart, warm gold and cream. The film flows into exactly that. missed before | Beats 6, 8 |
| 24/09 | הוא צריך כביכול להתאים לכל הפורמטים מדסקטופים למוביילים. כדקה סרטון. Every format, desktop to mobile, about a minute. | 16:9 master first, framed so the 9:16 version keeps the subject; 75 s per her script. | Delivery |
| 01/10 | שים לב שהכנסתי כמה הארות כדי שנהיה על אותו עמוד. I added notes so we are on the same page. | Checked: the file has no hidden comments; her notes are the text of the script itself (The Feeling, Keep Life Abstract, Music & Sound, North Star). Every one is a row below. | All |
| 01/10 | ההשראה שלי היא שהסרט ירגיש כמו מסע אחד רציף וכמעט בלתי פוסק פנימה One continuous, almost unstoppable journey inward. | One 3D camera from the first frame to the door. No cut anywhere: every change of place happens by flying through something. | All |
| 01/10 | כשהצופה כל הזמן נשאב לעוד שכבה ולא יודע מה הוא עומד לגלות ברגע הבא Always pulled into another layer, never knowing what comes next. | Each beat ends by entering the next thing (cloud, city, eye, pupil, cell, atom, darkness). The big surprise is held back: the inner galaxy. | All |
| 01/10 | חשוב לי שהעולם והדמות האנושית ירגישו מתוחכמים, קולנועיים ומעט ahead of our time The world and the person: sophisticated, cinematic, a little ahead of our time. | Built in 3D, so we design it: a near-future city of clean stone and glass at blue hour, soft light inside buildings, quiet screens in reflections; the person in a long dark coat, elegant, never a uniform or a suit from a stock catalogue. missed before | Beats 2, 3 |
| 01/10 | לא דמויות או סיטואציות יומיומיות וגנריות Not everyday or generic characters or situations. | This is what the v6 stock picks failed: a young man in a suit on mall tiles, the Shibuya crossing, Manhattan roofs. All removed. Real footage is kept only where it passes this sentence (the eye, the hand), with 3 choices each. missed before | Beats 2, 3, 4, 8 |
| 01/10 | אבל גם לא פנטזיה But not fantasy. | Real physics, real scale, real light. No creatures, no magic landscapes, and we do not copy the AI flowers from her product video. | All |
| 01/10 | כשהעומק, קנה המידה, הפרטיקלים, החושך, הסאונד, המהירות ורגעי השקט הם אלה שמייצרים את ה־WOW Depth, scale, particles, darkness, sound, speed and silence make the WOW. | Depth: 3 layers in every frame. Scale: universe to atom. Particles: one stream of light dust lives through the whole film and becomes stars, then city lights, then cells, then stars again. Darkness: 2 full blacks. Speed: the curve in section 6. Silence: 2. | All |
| 01/10 | שמתי כאן שני סרטונים להמחיש את האיכות, ושימת לב לפרטים כמו מעברים, עומקים, רשרוש של עצים, ובכלל את האנרגיה והעומק. שפה דומה. Two films to show the quality: transitions, depths, the rustle of trees, the energy. A similar language. | Both are fully 3D films, so ours is too. "Rustle of trees" is the living detail close to the lens (IO's leaves brushing the camera): in our city, trees and banners move in the wind near the lens, inside him fibres sway, and each has its own sound. missed before | Beats 2, 3, 4 |
| 01/10 | זו פלטפורמה זה יישב בכניסה הראשונית לפני האונבורדינג... כי זה חייב להיות וואו It sits at the very first entry, before onboarding. It must be WOW. | Ends on her own onboarding background, so the cut from film to app is invisible. missed before | Beat 8 |
| 01/10 | מהמם. מעבירה לשותף שלי גם שיתרשם. תקשיב הסרטו הזה בביצוע שלך ירוץ(: She loved our sample (the web of nerve cells that becomes the web of galaxies). | That idea stays the main WOW: the inner landscape turns into the galaxy. | Beat 5 |
| 01/10 | the images need to be a little more dynamic Partner (Rad): more dynamic. | The camera never stops, not even in the quiet moments (it drifts). | All |
| 01/10 | maybe the color palette can be shifted so it feels more immersive Partner: a palette that feels more immersive. | v6 went cold grey-blue and banned violet. Wrong. The palette now leads into her product's own colours: deep blue black, her violet, and warm gold for every light that means life. missed before | Look |
| 01/10 | ואנחנו מדברים גם על מסכים בגדלים שונים כן? Different screen sizes included. | Vertical after approval, re-framed, not cropped blindly. | Delivery |
| 02/10 | אשמח שנהיה על זה במקביל שהבחירות יהיו מדויקות, אז תשלב אותי בבקשה בתהליך Include me so the choices are exact. | She approves this plan, then the moving test of the opening, then the music (3 options), before the rest is built. | Process |
| 02/10 | שים לב שאנחנו צריכים להוריד טקסט לבקשתך We need to cut text, as you asked. | Done 04/10: 131 words to 114, 51 s, inside 75 s with room for the silences. | Voice |
| 02/10 | אשמח שלא תעבוד על זה בשבת. No work on Saturday. | Schedule has no Saturday. | Schedule |
| 02/10 | עוצמה + אינטימיות + מסתורין + אנושיות. לא משהו מדיטטיבי אלא משהו עמוק ועוצמתי. Voice: power, intimacy, mystery, humanity; deep and strong, not meditative. | Direction sheet for Rad (or Woman A). | Voice |
| 04/10 | היא נשמעת ״מסחרית מידיי״ צריך טונציה של נסיון חיים, משהו עם עומק בין כאב ל לשמחה ויופי ופליאה מהבריאה Not commercial: life experience, between pain and joy, beauty and wonder at creation. | Voice direction, and the film's feeling too: wonder, never an ad. | Voice, all |
| 04/10 | ובתור יוצר,תרגיש חופשי להציע רעיונות ויצירתיות משלך Bring your own ideas. | Our ideas, marked: the same galaxy outside and inside; the gold heart light that starts the journey out; the door light that becomes her onboarding. | Idea |
| 05/10 | שים לב שאם יש יותר מידיי קריינות נוריד כמובן בהתאמה. If there is too much voiceover, we cut. | 51 s of voice in 75 s: fits. | Voice |
| 05/10 | לך על משהו כזה קלאס נקי לא מסחרי Logo: classy, clean, not commercial (the thin ring from her page). | End card: DPNR + the thin ring, simple type, slow movement. | Beat 8 |
| 05/10 | רק משערת שנוכל באמת לדעת כשהכל יעמוד ביחד. We will only really know when everything stands together. | That is why she gets a moving test with sound before the full build, not pictures. missed before | Process |
| 05/10 | המשפט האחרון קצת נשמע איזי מידיי, הוא צריך להיות יותר רגוע עמוק פחות ״מתגרה״ Last line: calmer, deeper, less teasing. | Re-recorded 05/10 (pitch 161 to 140 Hz, no rise at the end); same note in Rad's sheet. | Voice |
| 06/10 | היה חשוב לנו הטון האנושי של המייסדים בחוויה הטכנולוגית The founders' human tone inside the tech experience. | The film ends warm, never cold; the person feels like a person (breath, weight, a hand that hesitates before the door). missed before | Beats 7, 8 |
| 06/10 | לא רצית לשלוח סטורי בורד או משהו לאישור? Didn't you want to send a storyboard first? | This plan is the storyboard. Nothing is built before she approves it. | Process |
| 06/10 | והסרטון הזה צריך להיות ברמה קולנועית. It has to be cinematic. | Real 3D, one camera, a real score, a 2.39 cinema frame. | All |
| 06/10 | לא הצלחתי להרגיש את הוואו. I couldn't feel the WOW. | One release, held back to 0:47, on the score's biggest hit, after 3 s of darkness. | Beat 5 |
| 06/10 | הוויס אובר נשמע חתוך, פחות זרימה The voiceover sounds chopped. | One continuous take; the picture is cut to the voice. | Voice |
| 06/10 | הסאונדטרק לא יושב לי טוב The soundtrack doesn't sit right. | A real score edited to the picture on its own parts; she picks from 3. | Sound |
| 06/10 | לא חוויתי חוויה קולנועית וגם לא הצלחתי להתחבר ולהבין את המסר No cinematic experience, and I couldn't connect to or understand the message. | The message must be seen, not said: the inner galaxy is visibly the same galaxy we flew past at the start (same shape, same colours, same light), held long enough to be recognised. Then the question card. missed before | Beat 5 |
| 06/10 | לא הרגשתי את העומקים, תחזור לסרטוני השראה ששלחתי לך I didn't feel the depths; go back to my references. | Both read at 1 frame a second: near, middle and far layers with haze between them in every frame. Same rule here, built in 3D so it is real depth, not a flat clip. | All |
| 06/10 | היה לי מאוד חשוב האיכות והתחושת העומק בכל פריים Quality and depth in every frame. | Every frame checked for 3 layers before it goes to her. | All |
| 06/10 | זה הרגיש כמו . . .פריימים בלי חיבור וסיפור. It felt like frames without connection or story. | One camera, no cuts. | All |
| 06/10 | האיכות גם מרגישה נמוכה, וזה מרגיש כמו סרטון שai Quality feels low, and it feels like an AI video. | Rendered in 3D at full size, master in 4K; no AI pictures as the base. | All |
| 06/10 | כרגע לא הרגשתי שאני צופה בסרטון אחד עם מסע וסיפור, אלא באוסף של סצנות ופריימים Not one film with a journey, but a collection of scenes and frames. | Same answer: one world, one camera. v6 mixed 3D with 6 different stock clips from 6 different cameras, which would have been a collection again. missed before | All |
| 06/10 | יש לנו בראש רמה קולנועית מאוד גבוהה. עומק, תלת ממדיות, תנועה, continuity בין הסצנות, איכות ורזולוציה גבוהה מאוד Depth, three-dimensionality, movement, continuity between scenes, very high quality and resolution. | Three-dimensional = the whole film is one 3D world (v6 was mostly flat stock). Continuity = one camera path. Resolution = rendered for a 4K master. missed before | All |
| 06/10 | ובעיקר תחושה של trailer אמיתי שמושך אותך פנימה Above all, a real trailer that pulls you in. | Trailer rhythm and a trailer score; the camera always moves inward until the turn at 0:51. | All |
| 06/10 | לקחת את כלי ה AI ולהפוך אותם למשהו שלא מרגיש כמו AI, אלא כמו יצירה קולנועית שלמה Take the AI tools and make something that doesn't feel like AI, a whole cinematic work. | She expects AI to be used, just never felt. So: 3D fixes the camera, the shapes and the light (that is what stops the AI wobble); AI is allowed only on top of our own 3D frames where it adds real-world texture (skin, cloth), tested shot by shot. missed before | Method |
| 06/10 | ברמה של ה references ששלחתי At the level of my references. | Section 3: what they do, measured, and how each is met. | All |
| 06/10 | גם ה voice over כרגע לא עובד... ראד אמריקאי ויש לו קול עמוק וחזק, אז זו יכולה להיות אופציה. The VO isn't working; Rad (American, deep, strong voice) could record. | Recommend yes; one-page guide for him. | Voice |
| 06/10 | זה הסרטון הראשון שהמשתמש רואה ב onboarding, והוא אמור להיות ה WOW moment של DPNR, כמעט כמו trailer למוצר ולעולם שאנחנו בונים The first thing a user sees; a trailer for the product AND the world we are building. | "The world we are building" = her product's world. v6 ignored it. Now the film ends in it: violet galaxy, gold light, her button colours. missed before | Beat 8 |
| 06/10 | אז בוא נבין איך אנחנו עושים reset לכיוון ומגיעים לשם. Let's reset the direction and get there. | This page is the reset; the moving test proves it. | Process |
| Part | Her script | What the film does |
|---|---|---|
| THE FEELING | This film should feel like an experience, not an explainer video. | No product UI, no feature words; feeling first. |
| THE FEELING | A continuous journey from the enormous universe outside them into the enormous universe within them. | Same galaxy outside and inside, one camera. |
| THE FEELING | Cinematic, intelligent, mysterious, immersive and slightly futuristic, but still believable and human. | Designed 3D world, real light; the person warm and human. |
| THE FEELING | Subtle hints of a world one step ahead: lighting, architecture, reflections, movement, atmosphere, interfaces or abstract visual layers. | The 3D city: quiet light in stone and glass, faint information in reflections, never a HUD. missed before |
| THE FEELING | Avoid the typical AI aesthetic: no fantasy worlds, excessive neon, floating glass bubbles, magical landscapes, exaggerated futuristic cities. | Her violet is used as light and gas, never neon tubes; city is restrained, near-future, not a sci-fi skyline. |
| KEEP LIFE ABSTRACT | We do not want literal life scenes illustrating every word. | Nothing illustrates a voice word. |
| KEEP LIFE ABSTRACT | Communicate pressure through movement, fragments, silhouettes, reflections, passing faces, light, architecture, sound, speed. | Beat 3 is built from exactly these, in 3D, around the still person. |
| KEEP LIFE ABSTRACT | The viewer should project their own life. The human is our anchor, not an actor. | His face is never fully shown: from above, from behind, the eye, the hand. |
| 0:00 THE UNIVERSE | Complete darkness. A single point of light. Moving toward it. Thousands of stars emerge. Accelerates toward a distant galaxy. "Where are we going?" | The moving test on this page, 13 s. |
| 0:00 AUDIO | Almost silence. A deep atmospheric frequency. A subtle pulse begins. | In the test: sub tone, pulse from 3 s. |
| 0:08 GALAXY TO HUMAN | Without feeling like a cut: Galaxy. Solar system. Earth. Atmosphere. City. Street. Human. | One 3D fall: past the Sun, NASA Earth at dusk, through the clouds, straight down into the 3D city, onto him. missed before |
| 0:08 GALAXY TO HUMAN | One person standing still within the movement of the world; the environment slightly ahead of today; people pass around them. | 3D: he stands still in a stone plaza, people pass as soft moving shapes. missed before |
| 0:17 THE OUTSIDE | Fragments of life: faces passing, reflections, crowds, light, architecture, screens or information briefly. | 3D fragments around him; the camera circles once. |
| 0:17 THE OUTSIDE | Suggest connection, pressure, achievement, rejection, expectations, uncertainty without telling. | Six fragments, one each: two silhouettes turning toward each other (connection), the crowd tightening (pressure), a tower lighting up floor by floor (achievement), a figure turning away (rejection), screens multiplying in the glass (expectations), the ground plane tilting slightly (uncertainty). missed before |
| 0:17 THE OUTSIDE | The person remains still while the world becomes fast and overwhelming. Music builds. Everything freezes. Sound disappears. | Freeze on one frame, full silence about 1.5 s. |
| 0:27 THE TURN INWARD | The camera slowly approaches the person. Intimate. Toward the eye. Closer. Through it. | Slow push to him; the eye is real macro footage (3 choices), we pass the pupil. |
| 0:27 THE TURN INWARD | Neural pathways. Electrical signals. Tissue. Blood. Microscopic structures. Not a medical documentary: an unknown landscape. | 3D landscape with a horizon and fog; light travels along paths; red of blood only as a warm glow deep below. missed before |
| 0:39 THE UNIVERSE WITHIN | Select one cell. Enter it. Molecules. Atoms. Particles. Closer. Deeper. Smaller. | 3D, one continuous dive, each layer darker and simpler. |
| 0:39 THE UNIVERSE WITHIN | Darkness. One tiny point of light echoing the first. Another. Thousands. Pulling back: a galaxy. The main WOW. Give it space. | The same point as frame 1, the same galaxy model as 0:06; pull back 6 s. |
| 0:51 INSIDE TO OUTSIDE | A pulse of light deep inside. Travel outward fast. Galaxy, particles, atoms, cell, body, person. | The pulse is gold, like the heart light of her Digital Twin; it rides out with us. missed before |
| 0:51 INSIDE TO OUTSIDE | The same world, but the relationship feels different; movement originates from within the person outward. | Same plaza; the light spreads from him; people slow and make room. |
| 1:01 THE QUESTION | Environment disappears. A vast dark space. Minimal. Architectural. Timeless. A simple doorway, thin warm light at the edges. The person walks toward it. Music intimate. | 3D space and door (frame below); he walks from behind. |
| 1:01 ON SCREEN | WHAT IS REALLY SHAPING YOUR LIFE? Hold. | Thin wide-spaced capitals, held 2.5 s. |
| 1:10 THE DOOR | Hand reaches. Touch. Door opens. Light floods toward the camera. It is the entrance. | Real backlit hand (3 choices) or 3D; the light floods to white. |
| 1:10 ON SCREEN | READY TO GO WITHIN? / BEGIN YOUR JOURNEY -> / DPNR | On her violet onboarding background. missed before |
| 1:10 FLOW | The door flows directly into the DPNR onboarding experience; the viewer has physically crossed the threshold. | The white settles into her real onboarding galaxy. missed before |
| MUSIC | Music is part of the ride: dopamine, anticipation, tension, curiosity, emotional release. Not meditation, wellness or corporate. | Hybrid orchestral score, she picks from 3. |
| MUSIC | Waves: mystery, acceleration, tension, silence, descent, discovery, release, tension, invitation. | Music map in section 8. |
| MUSIC | Silence when the world freezes. Heartbeat, low frequencies, neural textures going in. Approaching something, then almost nothing. RELEASE on the galaxy. One last build at the door. | Sound per beat in section 8. |
| NORTH STAR | We are not showing the viewer DPNR. We are making them curious about themselves. | No product shown until the very last frame, and then only her onboarding background. |
| NORTH STAR | At moments enormous, intimate, fast, almost still. Always another layer underneath. | The speed curve. |
| DELIVERABLES | Full English version: English VO and English on-screen text. | Main version. |
| DELIVERABLES | Hebrew subtitle version; leave clean space for Hebrew subtitles without covering important visuals. | 2.39 frame: subtitles in the band under the picture. |
OUR 3D rendered tonight on our machine, first look. REAL 4K real filmed clip, only where it passes her "not generic" test (section 6).




Not shown yet, on purpose: the city and the man. My first tries tonight looked like a video game: the city as plain dark boxes, the man stiff and plastic. Showing them would be showing her v2 again.
Her six feelings, without telling a story (script 0:17)
He stays still; the world speeds up; then everything freezes and the sound is cut.


Her words: "not a medical documentary, an unknown landscape that has always existed inside us". Built like a land, not a diagram. Heartbeat, low rumble and small electric crackles as pulses pass the lens.
One cell, inside it, molecules, atoms, particles; darkness for 3 s; one point of light (the same as frame 1); then thousands; the camera pulls back for 6 s and they are the galaxy from the opening. Her script: "give it space, don't rush it". The score's biggest hit lands on the pull back. She wrote she "couldn't understand the message" of v2: here the message is the picture itself, the same galaxy outside and inside, held long enough to be recognised.
A gold pulse of light starts deep inside (her Digital Twin's heart light) and we ride it out fast: galaxy, particles, cell, the landscape, out of the eye, up to the plaza. Same place, same people, but the light now spreads from him and the crowd slows and makes room. "The movement originates from within the person outward."

On screen, held 2.5 s:
WHAT IS REALLY SHAPING YOUR LIFE?


On screen: READY TO GO WITHIN? · BEGIN YOUR JOURNEY → · DPNR with the thin ring.
The door opens, light floods to white, and the white becomes her onboarding background. The viewer has physically crossed into the app, as her script asks.






Why only these two: an eye in extreme close-up and a hand in light are not "situations", nobody can call them generic, and real skin beats 3D skin at this distance. Everything with a place or people in it is our 3D. Thrown out from the last plan: the suit man on mall tiles (590160), Shibuya from above (6251049), the Manhattan drone (6371583), the crowd in an airport (607864), the man in a coat in a street (357134), a prison-cell door (288662).
Colour: from cold space into her violet and gold
One grade, one grain, one lens across the whole film; wide 2.39:1 frame (like IO), Hebrew subtitles in the band under the picture.
Text: only her words
WHAT IS REALLY SHAPING YOUR LIFE? and the end card. Thin, wide-spaced capitals (like Globosome's title), inside the 3D space, fading in. Nothing else written on screen.
Sound and voice
Unchanged from the last plan: she picks the score from 3 (A: Edge of Space, my pick), edited to the picture on bar lines; a sound for every moving thing; Rad recommended for the voice, Woman A as the one-take backup.
| Day | What |
|---|---|
| Wed 07/10 | You read this. Lital gets her short Hebrew version with the moving test by 18:00. |
| Thu 08/10 | On her yes: the whole fall, 0:00 to 0:27, in 3D with sound. |
| Fri 09/10 | The inside, 0:27 to 0:51 (until Shabbat). |
| Sat 10/10 | No work. |
| Sun 11/10 to Mon 12/10 | 0:51 to the end, the score, Rad's voice. |
| Tue 13/10 | Whole film, checked, then to her. |
| Wed 14/10 to Thu 15/10 | Her notes, final, Hebrew version. |
Your decision: ask her for an extension to Thu 15/10. I recommend yes. The current due date is Sun 11/10 09:44, Saturday is off, and a 3D film at her references' level cannot honestly be finished before then.
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